Tuesday, December 29, 2009

mr milller, your title, please.....?

a few times
i stole a glance
at you
stealing a glance
at me
and it looked
as if maybe
you thought
i was happier than you
and i would love
to have the opportunity
to tell you
that it isn't so.


Brian Miller said...

title...caught stealing...or chance glance...or somewhere between...

ah, title or no, i like your writing...

Not The Rockefellers said...

I love the title of this...sort of like an interruption in the middle of a daydream, played out like a movie scene...

sounds like a song in the making

Peace ~ Rene

Monkey Man said...

Lookers' back.

justsomethoughts... said...

mr miller - thank you.
i like "somewhere in between".

rich girl - i'm better with the words than i am with the notes.

monkey man - layered. love it.

Diane said...

If I was stealing a glance, that's not what I'd be thinking.

I'd be thinking, "Damn, that boy is cute!"

Just sayin'.

But the writing's still really good! :)

LaughOutLoud said...

...i dont think ones level of happiness can be compared with anothers - since ppl consider and base happiness on diff things -
i feel like theres almost no way to compare.

but - i love ur writing :)

Beth said...

For some reason, the visual of Eeyore popped into my head. He was always saying he was happy but he never looked it.

Great piece.

secret agent woman said...

Reminds me of a patient once who said, "Who can measure another's pain." That's stuck with me for 20 years.

justsomethoughts... said...

diane - thank you. and you are kind.

lol - thank you. and there's a comment!

beth - eyore rules! and thank you.

secret agent woman - very poignant. thank you for sharing.

Captain Dumbass said...

This is one of my favourites.

Marla said...

Wow ... yes.

justsomethoughts... said...

mon capitan - thank you.

marla - thank you.

from whence they come. and i am grateful.