Monday, May 10, 2010

the machine

and when i only speak so that you can answer
i know that i love you more than i could ever imagine
more than i could hope to express
only to clench my fists and make a guttural sound
something animal
something primal
something
bordering on painful

13 comments:

Sam Liu said...

"and when i only speak so that you can answer
i know that i love you more than i could ever
imagine"...that is a truly beautiful thought, one I've never contemplated, yet now wholeheartedly recognise. Writers who can unearth emotion we never even knew we had experienced ourselves truly do posses immense talent.

The sensuality of this piece is wondrous, and you've honestly captured the essence of what it is to be passionately in love..."bordering on painful". So very true.

Marla said...

This leaves me with few words. Simply beautiful and pure and raw. I love it.

Monkey Man said...

That is usually right before I hit her over the head with my club. Primal....I love it.

Brian Miller said...

i like that primal kinda love..

tight piece man!

Mmm said...

thank you for stopping by my blog! gonna take a spin around yours and see what I find here! Cheers.

Kate said...

The primal part.

Jingle said...

profound way to express love.
enjoyed your gift.

bobbybegood1 said...

There are so many ways to read into this. I'll take a negative POV. Are you being selfish? Are you only loving when the other person's speaking to you? And, does love have to be so painful? Primal I can uderstand. But, hurtful?

Or do you only hear the other person's voice - unaware of the world around you?

P. S. I was not so good in Eng. Lit. So help me out with understanding.

JoJo said...

I have to confess that I just don't 'get' poetry. Unless it's set to music. lol

Loved Monkey Man's response though. Cracked me up.

Lola Sharp said...

Animal and primal is usually the way.

I'm glad to see you're back.

~Lola

Jingle said...

beautiful writing,
Happy Thursday!

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